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Thursday, December 4, 2014
Thesis- Syrian Civil War
The negative economic and social impact of the Syrian Civil War has roots of harsh political corruption and environmental conditions, but the damage and extent of the war can be slowed or even halted by short term solutions.
I think your thesis is grammatically correct with good transitions and choice of words, and it also grabs my attention. I would consider adding more detail about the impact of the Syrian Civil War globally.
I agree with Melissa. This is a nice thesis that doesn't have awkward wording! The whole sentence seems a little vague and generic though, like it could be a thesis for any war/civil war paper.
Definitely on the right track! You may want to rearrange your words a bit for better flow, though. Also, make sure to address the news/media coverage in your thesis.
I think your thesis is grammatically correct with good transitions and choice of words, and it also grabs my attention. I would consider adding more detail about the impact of the Syrian Civil War globally.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Melissa. This is a nice thesis that doesn't have awkward wording! The whole sentence seems a little vague and generic though, like it could be a thesis for any war/civil war paper.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely on the right track! You may want to rearrange your words a bit for better flow, though. Also, make sure to address the news/media coverage in your thesis.
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